Above it / from the top/ falls like cataract 
Gets form/ flowed down  like /drop and tear
Underground there /make /lakes and rivers
Also dripping / on my face/ like sweat

Underground there /make /lakes and rivers
Above it / from the top/ falls like cataract
Gets form/ flowed down  like /drop and tear
Also dripping / on my face/ like sweat


 

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Thank you so much  my dear Dione 

Dear poet Karpadeli Eftichia

Yesterday I've tried to make my comment and the corrections to your poem Trívioletra AGUA..... but as well the first time -  which lead me, to make an English note about the rules of Trívioletra !!  - my PC broke down and I couldn't continue as I wish so much! 

So .......first of all let me thank you your participation! It's an honour to have your inspiration in Trívioletra! I know it's not too easy ...but really it isn't so difficult!! It's just pay attention to the rules!!! 

Now... I'm so sorry  but you must correct your poem to be a Trívioletra one! 

I leave you to make your own corrections, because there is some parts that it has to be re-write... and just the author can do that isn't it?!

receive all my .... beijos de poesiaaaaa

Chantal Fournet

Maria-José Chantal F. Dias  thank you 

made some changes I think is more understandable

Above it / from the top/ falls like cataract 
Gets form/ flowed down  like /drop and tear
Underground there /make /lakes and rivers
Also dripping / on my face/ like sweat

Underground there /make /lakes and rivers
Above it / from the top/ falls like cataract
Gets form/ flowed down  like /drop and tear
Also dripping / on my face/ like sweat


 

Oh My God!!! I did it!!! I'm sooooooo glad to be able of posting!!! gosh!!!!!! I was like being a traumatized woman!!! LOL

Well now coming back to our little rules and forms

  • 1st one: There's the TITLE AGUA and you must have the 2nd theme (wrote in capital letters) always present in the 2nd verse of the 1st triplet! That's why I said it must be correct by you!
  • 2nd one: This should be like a 1st one!! because it's too much important!!

Triplets in Trívioletra  are not a sentence cuting in three verses! they may have a sense between them or not! the sense is in the insight you may have or you may want to transmit!!!

  • 3rd one: always number your triplets!

 I hope this few points and what I've wrote in the rules of the Contest, should help you to love write more and more Trívioletras Poems!!!

beijos de poesiaaaaaaaa 

Chantal Fournet

Maria-José Chantal F. Dias thank you I will try ......and thank you for all explanation about rules and forms  

My Dear Poet Kapardeli Eftichia

I feel always such a great trouble correcting Poets... but I have a enormous problem inside of my genes I'm unable to leave wrong form, instead of the correct way! Indeed, this kind of poem have some rules and we must respect or there's no way at all to call it "trívioletra" !!

It's like called as Sonnet .......an extremely large and long long poem!!!

For this I must apologize! but when great poets have the touch to Minimalist Poetry, and arrive to this group ... I insist with them!!

Kisses and Love

Chantal Fournet

Maria-José Chantal F. Dias

You are a wonderful person I love your smile in photo

Thank you for everything

I AM GRATEFUL WHO I KNOW YOU 

WISHES FOR SUCCESS 

Thank you for your words! 

Meanwhile I'm expecting anxiously(it's true!) for the your Poem Trívioletra corrected by yourself! It would be a great exercise of apprentice! I'm anxious to read it...Because it's necessary and I highly recommend you do it! Because I love your write and ... what you did, it's not a Trívioletra Poem

beijos de poesiaaaaaaaa

Chantal Fournet

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